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The Storm Within by ~HeroAmongstThieves:iconHeroAmongstThieves:



Standing in the middle of a crowded room;
Silent chatter chews away at my ears.
The heat stifles me.
Help; I cannot breathe.

I fill my lungs;
To scream out loud;
That I need help.

But the air is stale and hot;
And it burns every part of me;
Until my muscles go weak from starvation;

And my mind falls into a fog.

Standing in the middle of the highway;
On the darkest; foggiest night.
The mist runs a chilly finger up and down my arm.

I fill my lungs;
To call out;
If anyone else is out there.

But the fog is too thick and cold;
It freezes every part of me;
Until my body is stiffer than ice;

And I cannot move to save myself.

Walking into the middle of a storm.
Rain whipping my hair around me;
Stinging my face and my eyes.

I fill my lungs;
To scream your name;
For you to come back to me,

But the thunder is too loud;
And the water too high;
And it fills my lungs where air should be;

And I drown with no one to save me.
©2007-2008 ~HeroAmongstThieves
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=coldestofflames:iconcoldestofflames: Nov 10, 2007, 5:54:04 PM
This is very powerful. I love all the strong symbols and in-your-face presence of emotion. It's real and surreal at the same time.

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~Left-Handed-Words:iconLeft-Handed-Words: Nov 10, 2007, 6:11:13 PM
Be brave, storms pass in time. One way or another this will end and a solution will present itself... I love you.

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~HeroAmongstThieves:iconHeroAmongstThieves: Nov 10, 2007, 9:10:05 PM
I love you too.

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~HeroAmongstThieves:iconHeroAmongstThieves: Nov 10, 2007, 9:10:56 PM
Thank you.

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=coldestofflames:iconcoldestofflames: Nov 11, 2007, 6:41:45 AM
You're welcome. 8)

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